Kahaan Humsafar Umr Bhar

Hi,
Thanks for visiting the blog again.
just a few words before I post another ghazal here.
You can criticize the Ghazal as much as you like, what I am really looking for is your honest opinion or feedback. I want to know if these ghazals are good, mediocre or plain trash. Finally, a word explaining why you think so would be greatest help but that is optional.

So here is the Ghazal.

I like Ist, IVth, Vth and Last sher very much of this ghazal....Why? I will tell later first let me kow what do you think of this effort.

Glossary:
Gaayban : Often

Waiting eagerly
Abid

My First Ghazal - Bahut Udas Hoon Mein

Well, My first post in the blogging world. Not sure where to begin, but being a interview veteran after numerous MBA interviews, I will start with "Who am I??"

Though, I have quite a few interests and hobbies, the things which is most dear to me, closest to me is Urdu Poetry.

So, in my first post, I am daring to post a ghazal, which I wrote long back. With all due respect to all the poets in world, any error is highly regretted, Do let me know what you guys think.

So the Ghazal is: (Click on the image below for high resolution image)


Glossary:
Saaz-E-Afsurda : The Musical Instrument of Despair and Hopelessness.
Nabz : Pulse
Chagaron : Doctors
Khalaon : Outer Space, Shoonya, Long Distances


Please tell me your thoughts on this, criticism is good.

Abid